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The Only One by =Ex1:iconEx1:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Fixed


You can't turn away from them;
they'll follow you to the grave.
Painted on your soul
syllables inadvertently saved.

A smile each day,
words people always say
facilitate life's play
as it's divinely arranged.

Remember this as it passes by
trying to grab futilely
onto a piece of time
while second by second
we slowly die.

Watch helplessly as it changes,
becoming what they used to say
and leave us behind
with memories that fade.

When it's all said and done
standing in front of the mirror looking back
you wonder if they remember too
...or if you're the only one.
©2006-2009 =Ex1
:iconex1:

Author's Comments

Written thinking of how quickly it all changes.

"I'll never forget." is so damn cliche...

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:iconanimegal92:
~AnimeGal92 Apr 25, 2006, 12:12:44 PM
very nice poem, it has a nice rythm to it but theres one spot that struck me as awkward where it says: facilitate life's play as it's divinely arranged. I think the arranged throws off the rythm a tad bit, but other than that it sounds great to me.

and plus mines just an opinion some other person might love that spot :)

nice job
:icongartoss:
~gartoss Apr 25, 2006, 2:05:46 PM
I'm sure I'll be the only one later for a lot of things. I'm like the Giver. I keep the memories to hide the bad things from everyone else.

--
"Why are you still alive?!"
"Because God and the Devil don't want me."
:iconangolsakura515:
~AngolSakura515 Apr 25, 2006, 4:57:30 PM
It's really beautiful, you're getting better and better. *smiles* I wasn't going to read it, but it made me feel better.
Great job.
:iconjesslogan:
~JessLogan Apr 25, 2006, 5:20:35 PM
Simply Beautiful!

--
My heart is filled with joy that sorrows to my death.

Thy governed words transcribed on a page for thy audience to consume in a pleasurable enjoyment. This is my art.
:iconex1:
=Ex1 Apr 26, 2006, 8:34:24 AM
I can understand where you're coming from. But I can't think of plausible ways to change it. I thought that as I wrote it but since this was one of the pieces that took me less time to write I can't really...fix it.

But thank you for both the compliment and the critique. I appreciate them. *smiles*

--
Death before dishonor.

Ex
:iconmikeyblighe:
~MikeyBlighe Apr 26, 2006, 8:35:46 AM
Ooh, futilely is a hard word to pull off, but you managed it!

Sigh, I wish I could latch on to one fragment of time and just stay there... why do things keep moving so fast?

--
"They ate every letter in the alphabet and still had an appetite."
:iconex1:
=Ex1 Apr 26, 2006, 8:39:24 AM
*sighs*

Too often I'm guessing that I'll be the only one to remember a lot of things. It makes me wonder if they even mattered when they happened sometimes...*wistful gaze to the floor*

--
Death before dishonor.

Ex
:iconex1:
=Ex1 Apr 26, 2006, 8:42:03 AM
Thank you. *smiles gently*

--
Death before dishonor.

Ex
:iconex1:
=Ex1 Apr 26, 2006, 8:43:22 AM
You weren't going to read it? *fiegns astonishment* I'm hurt...*chuckles*

I kid, I kid. I have to be serious and thank you for the compliments though, sis. I'm glad it made you feel better, too.

--
Death before dishonor.

Ex
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